August 28, 2009

Summation

Here are the three products from the first exercise in Visual Communications 1. Communication is something that I need to work on, as these works seem to have multiple problems with them.

Pressure.

To improve this:
-Pay close attention to craft-keep glue off the page, and make sure circles are aligned correctly.
-The middle circle should be smaller, and centered equally between the two larger circles.
-Make sure that the smaller circle is not as covered by the others, as this creates an unwanted perception of depth. They need to appear on the same flat field.

Structure.

To improve this:
-Once again, watch the craft. Some circles are overlapping more than others.
-Consider flipping the whole thing upside down?

Escape.

To improve this:

-Rearrange dots, so that it is easier to tell that the one dot is moving away from the group-having it missing from the center does not make a clear idea.
-Craft is poor. Pay more attention when lining up the circles, they are all uneven.

Overall, my craftsmanship seems to be pretty poor. Also, composition in all of these pieces is not very interesting. I'll work on improving these over the weekend.

To Do:

1 comment:

  1. Kelsey, I'm glad to see you are embracing the blog already as a tool for documentation and note taking. Keep it up.

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